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Comments I think it would be more powerful if you made his chin kinda dimply like when you cry.
 Oh my gosh, the poor darling! I don't want it to be any different...I'm almost crying for him as it is! (Whatever happened to dear Bonnie...IDK but his expression is breaking my heart.)
 Please somebody hug him! Hug him quick! *sniffle* -- "We accept the love we think we deserve." ~ Stephen Chbosky  Yea what shiro said.
When you look at someone crying their chin makes these dimple things. Even when you pout it happens, look in the mirror and try to make the same face as Bon-hwa's, and you'll notice the dimples as well as some frown lines around the mouth stretching from the nose.  Noice! I think the only thing which would add anything is his head position.
Without his shoulders to view, the neutral position of his head here doesn't add to his overall expression. If his head was tipped slighty down it would express a more kind of sadness/hopelessness and tipped up would be like a kind of question, liek, 'Oh whaaaaaaaai was my day so shite? WHAAAAAAI did I leave on the waffle iron!! Baaaaaaaaaaw!' And so on so forth XD Totally ace pic <3 -- When Dante stole my heart it was flat out thievery. I asked for it back but he told me he sold it to a homeless person for some smokes  Sad face, Dante, sad face.  Beautiful! I really like how this came out; I think you did a great job portraying sadness. The lips are full and jutted out like he's sobbing and his eyebrows scrunch up together like he's in pain. You did a great job!
-- sex0rz? : UUU  I really like how you did it in a profile-ish view, Yet you can still see both eyes, Gives more feel to the picture.
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-- "Me and the skeleton rose, lay on our backs one night. Watching those luminous roads, tying knots in the night.  that is beautiful, and terribly sad at the same time. He looks so tired =\
-- ~ You can never have too much sky. ~ : Owl's Tear :  The emotion is really powerful in the eyes, almost to the point where you don't have to do much with the chin and mouth area. As you said, it's not like he's full out wailing here.
I do think, however that you did a lot of good work with his lower lip, but not much of that translates into the upper lip. It looks a bit too flat between his nose and where the lip actually begins. I think maybe putting some lines around his nose and above his top lip would make his mouth mirror his eyes more. You've pretty much got that started already, but it's a bit too subtle, I think. All in all, however, it's very successful as is. -- Yeah, that was sarcasm. Deal with it.  Trying to pinpoint what exactly needs to be done is a bit hard because the longer I look at it, the more I start to think that it's perfect. However, I see what you mean about the chin. My suggestion would be to exaggerate the downturn of the mouth a bit more, not too much, but just enough to match the intensity of the eyebrows. Hope this helps.
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I also love how you used the rule of thirds and put the character's face closest to the side they are facing, making them feel closed in, which really made a great impact. And finally, the pencil lines are great, using some curved, some jagged really showed me a new cooler style. Amazing!
That said, let's analyze the picture. What you mentioned about his chin, I think it's because the mouth is not following the axis of simetry, it seems to be a little displaced to the right (our right), maybe for that reason the chin doesn't fit well and seems a bit withdrawn (not sure if that's the word).
As for the expression, must say when I saw the fullview image the first thing I thought was "it needs a little more emotion" but after reading your comment I can see the proper feeling I think you wanted to achieve: that moment, after holding the tears for a long while, when you get to somewhere safe and just in the second you close your eyes the tears start to fall.
Maybe curving the line of his mouth just a little tad down would help to reinforce the expression.
But, in short, I think the expression is very well caught, just that thing with the jaw seems to need correction.
Hope it helps, I'm a mess for critiques in english.
Poor Bonnie ;_;
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